Friday Writings #135 - Five Found Poems
Poets and Storytellers United
"...take one of our poems or stories and turn it into a new piece of writing by removing some words and/or sections."
Found poetry from my own poetry. How fun! After the first, I kept going. Fortunately, they're short.
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1 - original
the clouds
at dawn
the bronze butterfly
over my head
the moon climbing
out of the city
the dust of snow
in a future sky
in the end
it’s beautiful
2 - original: Wordpools
waves
bring words
with the tide
listen
booming phrases
ebbing and flooding
touch
the pools.
drown in words
#3 - original
I sit.
In the distance,
past the horizon,
the end of the world.
No one sees
the sun drown
a blood red death.
I step off
to walk
on moonbeams.
#4 - original
I watch the summer sky.
I imagine I see you,
a memory just out of reach.
#5 - original
the tar is oozing
the houses closed
curse days
dread nights
waiting for nonexistent breath
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Some of the original poetry is evocative. I do like your choice of words and how you transformed existing work into something crisp and new.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I had fun, but still like the originals.
DeleteHaiku-like stream of conscious. The prompt helps set the words free to play.
ReplyDeleteYes. I actually tried to fit #4 into 5/7/5, but it just wouldn't go.
DeleteI read the original "It's beautiful to have chosen" and the erasure version... both charming in their own way...
ReplyDeleteJim here - You did good with the new. I feel you liked the original much. I liked it better than the original too, like me.
DeleteI like all the originals best!
DeleteI am touching the pool, wanting to swim in it...
ReplyDeleteThere was absolutely nothing wrong with any of the originals! But maybe that's beside the point. I LOVE all the new poems you found within them.
ReplyDeleteNicely done! These are great.
ReplyDeleteThese are wonderful. I really love that last one.
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