Untitled Golden Shovel
Writers' Pantry #52
https://poetsandstorytellersunited.blogspot.com/2021/01/writers-pantry-52-years-beginning.html
I've been playing with some new, to me, poetry forms. April is the Blogging from A to Z Challenge, and my plans are A-Z of poetry forms. I like to get a head start, especially since I also participate on my other blog.
This is a Golden Shovel. It was created by Terrance Hayes, an award-winning poet and professor in New York. https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poets/terrance-hayes
The "rules" are:
- take lines, or one line, from an existing poem
- take each word and use it, in order, as an end word in your new poem
- give credit
My poem uses the words from the last line of Edna St. Vincent Millay's Time Does Not Bring Relief (Sonnet II),
"and so stand stricken so remembering him."
I had told him “yes” already, and
it’s too late to change that now, so
I let my words stand
though I am stricken
at the thought. I am so
cruel, remembering
I had never loved him.
©2021 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved
That just spun the line in a different direction and still kept a sadness.
ReplyDeleteI think you're right, still sad, in a different way.
DeleteI have a feeling that many of us know what it is to pretend to love...
ReplyDeleteProbably so. It's just so sad though. We only get one life, we should be happier than that.
DeleteA great example of the golden shovel! Well done.
ReplyDeleteSo happy to hear you say so! I had never heard of them until I looked for forms starting with G.
Delete'and this is a great poem'
ReplyDeleteThanks. The ending words definitely came from a great poem by a great poet.
DeleteWell done You wove that into a great poem Very creative
ReplyDeleteThank you so much.
DeleteThis say so much with so few words--really well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you. :)
DeleteThanks for reminding me of the golden shovel form. You've done it beautifully!
ReplyDeleteThank you for saying so! That means a lot.
DeleteGreat use of the form....must give this a shot. Looks challenging
ReplyDeleteInteresting poem...
I think it is challenging or not depending on what words you use. I didn't find this one particularly so. Maybe it was beginners luck picking the right line.
DeleteI've never tried a golden shovel, but its there, somewhere, on my list, if only I can find the line I want to use. Ever try a Sevenling? I highly recommend. Check it out here https://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/sevenling/
ReplyDeleteAnd I post them often on my blog. Here's just one: https://rlavalette.wordpress.com/2021/01/07/after-the-genie/
I have not, no. I'll have to give it a try. I do like yours!
Deleteit's not easy, and you have done it so effortlessly.
ReplyDeletesuch seamless movement, won't know it's a golden shovel if it is not mentioned. :)
Thank you! I happened to use just the right line with just the right words to make my first one easy I think!
DeleteThis makes me want to try a golden shovel poem. :)
ReplyDeleteDo! I enjoy using lines or words and see what comes out. Like prompts, so many different poems result from everyone.
DeleteSadly if she never loved him it is the narrator that will be hurt the most in the future.
ReplyDeleteThat's true, especially if she finds he felt the same all along! At least she doesn't try to justify it someway, she knows it's "cruel." To both, yes. Robs her of a happy relationship.
DeleteThat's an intriguing story in a tiny space. I have to wonder what comes next for them both.
ReplyDeleteThat's up to you to decide!
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