24 Seasons: Usui (Snow Becomes Rain) No. 22

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 24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry Challenge, No. 22

 Snow Becomes Rain (February 19 – March 4) Usui 雨水

"Your syllabic poetry writing invitation is to choose a kigo word or phrase from the seasonal kigo list on the post. You can select from the Winter and Early Spring categories (Yuki Teikei Haiku Society) on the kigo word list links below. Share your kigo word on your post."

I have written a kouta with the kigo phrase, "the month of expectation,"  using plural "months."   

I have edited the original to change "the" in the last line to "nor," as it wasn't clear that "he" did not live to see the spring blooms. 

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These months of expectation

promise nothing to me now.

He'll not see another spring,

nor cherries in bloom.


©2024 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved 

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Comments

  1. JadeLiFebruary 20, 2024 at 11:29 AM

    I'm happy he held on long enough to see the cherries bloom <3

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    1. LisaFebruary 27, 2024 at 9:24 AM

      I edited that last line to "nor" since I do believe "the" muddied what I meant! Thank you.

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  2. theindiesheFebruary 25, 2024 at 10:23 AM

    Beautifully poignant

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  3. Yvette M CalleiroFebruary 25, 2024 at 7:02 PM

    There is so much grief in that poem, Lisa! Sending hugs your way...

    Yvette M Calleiro
    http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com

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  4. AnonymousFebruary 27, 2024 at 7:50 AM

    This is very sad. Robbie

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  5. ben AlexanderFebruary 27, 2024 at 11:35 AM

    I love how powerfully your kouta captures the melancholy of unfulfilled anticipation and the fleeting nature of life's promises!

    Much love,
    David
    SkepticsKaddish.com

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