Waiting
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Friday Writings #85: First Lines
"For today’s optional prompt, I invite you to write poetry or prose inspired by a fantastic first line. One that hooked you. One that lingers..."
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I’m sitting here where you left me
hardly more than a week ago.*
A week of year-long days,
waiting in this place I broke
my heart.
I come in hopes that one of
these long days
I’ll find you sitting here.
Waiting for me.
Perhaps that’s why I come,
to be here first.
You’ll see me here and know
I never meant for you to stay
away
although I told you go.
I’ll be sitting here,
waiting.
Hope to see you soon.
©2023 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved
* First line of Cold Flat Junction, by Martha Grimes. It was published five years after Hotel Paradise, the first in the Emma Graham series. So, five long years have past for the reader, yet for Emma it's only been a little over a week.
"A week of year-long days,
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These opening lines are wonderful, and every alluring. I like what it says of time, relationships, heartbreak...
Thank you. Your kind comments mean much to me.
DeleteMost intriguing, and it seems to me you've captured the emotion beautifully. Now I'll have to hunt up both those books! (And probably the rest of the series too.)
ReplyDeleteI always loved that first line. I will say, I took great poetic license with it!
DeleteLove what you did with the challenge! Cheers!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Helen! :)
DeleteWow, you certainly capture the emotions and longing and hope very well. Lovely work.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
DeleteFeel the emotions in this one. I've read some Martha Grimes books. She is a wonderful writer.
ReplyDeleteUntil recently. Her last few Richard Jury's are like someone else wrote them. I wasn't kind in reviewing on Good Reads! The Emma Graham's are so different you wouldn't know she wrote both series.
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