Cloud Giants
Tanka Tuesday Weekly Poetry Challenge No. 314
This week's challenge is to "write a shadorma, or series of shadorma, using three to five of the random words provided."
Words: Scale, fish, month, soup,
smile, sticks, slave, property, songs, brushes, rock, disease, shade, cloud,
giants, polish, wing, approval, spring, grape, books, comparison, walk, front,
hot
I have written four, which sort of tell a story of a sunny spring day interrupted by rain. I will insist that "giants" is two syllables, even as the "official" syllable counter shows it one.
I
I sip soup
in the company
of bird songs.
Spring arrived!
I smile in my approval
of this warm spring day.
II
Cloud Giants
roll across blue skies.
Welcome rain
gently falls.
Birds trill songs of approval,
thanks for spring showers.
The sun fades.
Grey Cloud Giants pass
overhead.
Rain begins.
I run for cover, my books
dry under my shirt.
IV
Cloud Giants
clash high above me.
Light spears fly.
Thunder rolls.
Angry, they toss stones of ice
and blow frozen breath.
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Great poems! Giants is definitely two syllables. I have found the syllable checker to make small errors such as this as well. I love your "light spears fly" line! Very clever!
ReplyDeleteYvette M Calleiro :-)
http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com
I can imagine someone I know from Texas saying "g'ants" in one syllable! Like "graham" becomes "gram." Thank you for your kind comments!
DeleteLisa, these shadorma are fabulous. I really enjoyed your use of the words provided and how everything came together for a story poem. Excellent!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I appreciate your comments. I wasn't sure I wanted to give shadorma a try at first. I'd only written two before this.
DeleteThe clouds move across the sky like your shadorma move down the page.
ReplyDeleteGood on you for saving the books! 😁
ReplyDeleteSincerely,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com
I love the movement in time and weather through this sequence. Lovely.
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