24 Seasons: Shubun (Cold Dew) No. 3

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Tanka Tuesday 24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry Challenge No. 3 

Cold Dew (October 9 – October 22) Shubun 秋分 

"... choose a kigo word or phrase from the seasonal kigo list on the post, or you can choose from the autumn category... Share your kigo word on your post."

I wrote two. One, a haiku using the word "chrysanthemums."

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yellow chrysanthemums in

the blue cloisonné vase  

©2023 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved

The other is a shahai (photo haiku), with the kigo phrase "birds head south," replacing "birds" with "geese," as they are heading noisily south over my house daily here in Southern Oregon.  


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Comments

  1. D.L. FinnOctober 12, 2023 at 9:11 PM

    Both wonderful and I could hear the geese flying over

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  2. Colleen M. ChesebroOctober 15, 2023 at 12:15 PM

    I love the mums and the geese flying south, Lisa. It is kind of sorrowful seeing them fly overhead. They are really noisy here. Sometimes they wake me up in the middle of the night. I guess they've got to get south quick!

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  3. JadeLiOctober 16, 2023 at 6:29 PM

    Wonderful choice of kigo in the yellow mums.

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  4. willowdot21October 17, 2023 at 7:51 AM

    Yes beautiful verses , I love to see the birds and geese flying south this time of year 💜

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  5. New Release BooksOctober 25, 2023 at 5:33 PM

    Beautiful verses.

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