The Tragedy: Or, in Which We Learn Why Handrails Were Invented

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 Tanka Tuesday 

Weekly Poetry Challenge No. 318

"This week, using the painting as your inspiration, please write either a syllabic poetry form or..."

The Expected One
1860
painting by Ferdinand Georg Waldmüller (Museum: Bavarian State Painting Collections)

I have written a triple tetractys.  The tetractys was invented by Ray Stebbing and is a five line poem with the syllable count of 1/2/3/4/10.  It can be written with more than one verse, but with an inverted syllable count in each verse.  So, mine is 1/2/3/4/10/10/4/3/2/1/1/2/3/4/10

My

belov'd,

All Sorrow

shall be my name

ere we meet again in heaven.  Belov'd!

I crouched, posy sweet at hand, a surprise

to win your love,

to pledge my

troth. 

Oh!

Belov'd!

A startle.

A short stumble.

A long tumble down the perilous rocks.


©2023 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved

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Comments

  1. Yvette M CalleiroMay 8, 2023 at 4:59 AM

    Oh, my goodness! This was brilliant! I had such a great laugh with your poem. (I know...I have a twisted sense of humor). Great poem, Lisa!

    Yvette M Calleiro :-)
    http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com

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  2. ColleenMay 8, 2023 at 9:12 AM

    Lisa, this was such a great take on the poem. Thanks so much! I did chuckle! xx

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    1. LisaMay 8, 2023 at 4:48 PM

      Thanks! I couldn't get my mind off those rocks, the narrow path, and how she wasn't paying attention at all. Add in the suitor jumping up at her, and it was a recipe for disaster! I am quite impressed with the look of love on face, even though we only can see part of it. I can almost hear him sigh when she comes into view.

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  3. willowdot21May 8, 2023 at 10:23 PM

    Lisa this is lovely and flows like a stream .

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