October's Breath
Friday Writings #187
"...write a poem of celebration, whether of a person, a thing, an event… Optional extra: do it in the form of a Sapphic ode."
I got the syllables right, as for the meter? I have no idea! If not, it's a syllabic poem celebrating cooler days!
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| ©2024 Lisa Smith Nelson |
I rejoice in the cooler days of autumn,
when faces lift to October's soothing breath.
With dying light, the season's hush appease a
summer weary soul.
©2025 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved
#syllabicpoetry #poetsandstorytellersunitied #sapphicode
How beautiful- sweet and crisp as a falling leaf preparing for autumn - Jae
ReplyDeleteI thought that leaf looked like a perfect leaf!
DeleteSweetly done.
ReplyDeleteThank you. :)
DeleteI love it! The main thing, I think, is to make a poem that works, and you have done so beautifully. I don't know if one can even talk about metre in regards to a Sapphic ode: the pattern of stresses is so uneven, and so strange to our ears. In fact, descriptions of the original form talk about 'long' and 'short' syllables, which we who use English equate to heavy and light stresses, so I don't know that we are really writing Sapphic verse anyway. Strictly speaking, you haven't got the stresses placed exactly; but you have got your syllable count right, and you have created a very lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you. This is why I avoid meter! Rhyme and syllables I can handle!
DeleteIt fits the meter. If you can sing it to the tune of "Praise ye the Father for HIs loving kindness," it's a Sapphic ode. Seasons are a good classical topic, too.
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Thank you for that tip. I don't know the song, however I'm sure I can locate it.
DeleteBeautifully said. Autumn's breath can be so refreshing after the summer's heat.
ReplyDeleteAutumn is my favorite season, even if it ushers in winter. Winter used to be my least favorite, but I think summer has taken that spot.
DeleteLiking the ode, Lisa. Refreshing in general most years. But this.year Autumn is very sweaty. All Autum days here have been at least in the high 90s and a handful of low 100s.
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p.s. (May bore you) Update on my story today. "I still have the car and drive it. We are Texas, they have classified it as a Texas Antique Auto meaning at least 25 years old and I don't drive or use it for work or school. Low insurance rates and I only have to renew its license once every five years."