Tanka Tuesday Poetry Challenge: Specific Form - Shadorma
Tanka Tuesday Poetry Challenge: Specific Form
Cheryl has asked us to write a syllabic poem using the form of the shadorma.
The shadorma is six lines with a specific syllable count per line. 3/5/3/3/7/5
Multiple stanzas are permitted and are called a shadorma series. Shadormas are usually unrhymed.
Even though I have written shadorma poems before, the three syllable lines were the most difficult for me this time. I tried several poems to end up with one I was pleased with. These are my results, and I am not terribly pleased with any! This is not fishing for compliments, just the truth.
Speaking of truth...
Liar
I like rain.
No one sees my tears,
just wetness
on my cheeks.
They can't see my heart shatter
when I say “I'm fine.”
Winter Chill
Ice-cold breeze
this November day.
Blasts of wind,
trees stripp’d bare.
You'd think it was December
seeing snowy hills.
Spring is in the Air Mailbox
Catalogs
arrive, tempting me.
Crying out,
"Spring is near!”
Will I take their bait, order
more seeds than I'll plant?
Tomatoes.
Those without a doubt.
Green beans too.
Zinnias.
Maybe a new type of squash.
Fall days with spring dreams.
I'm Not Your Mother
When you say
"I love you," what I
hear is that
you need me,
like you would need a mother.
Not a part I'll play.
©2024 Lisa Smith Nelson. All Rights Reserved
I like all the verses but I agree the Liar is definitely the strongest 💜
ReplyDeleteThese are all fabulous, Lisa! Liar is definitely my favorite!
ReplyDeleteYvette M Calleiro :-)
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((Jules(Paige) from Tanka Tuesday)) I can relate to all of your verses. Though I have not had any seed catologs yet - I do have quite a few stored in my freezer.
ReplyDeleteI don't think we have to like everything we write. Our emotions do play with how we place the words. I have tons that I'm not fond of, but they flowed and relieved some angst - so it is all good.
The last one reminds me of a boyfriend I was pre-engaged to but let go for 'true love' ;)
Lisa, I love these shadorma! They are concise and perfect in my book!
ReplyDeleteThese shadormas are excellent. Well done !
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